Perhaps you could make the story a little longer by repeating the first piece. It would remind the reader of "life" underwater and how it can be so final. Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed the story as is. But when I reached the end I felt the need to rewind to read that first part again.
Perhaps you could make the story a little longer by repeating the first piece. It would remind the reader of "life" underwater and how it can be so final. Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed the story as is. But when I reached the end I felt the need to rewind to read that first part again.
Thanks Victor, that is a good suggestion.
Clever story - a bit too realistic? I know several women who have been in a similar situation, although the outcomes were a little different!
Me, too, Nigel : (